Daily affirmations of a word mercenary
Dear God. Feed was incredibly good. So ominous. So well-written. I love that the author managed to drop in reference to the ignorant characters unwittingly speaking in a sestina. I had to go look the word up, and then go back and check the chapter. Clever, clever writer. Highly recommended to young and not-young adults alike. The ending made me shiver.
(Thanks, Erica!)
For my own amusement, here is the sestina of dialogue featured in Feed. I’ve taken out everything but just the dialogue spoken, and it won’t make much sense out of context…it’s a group of futuristic teens playing spin the bottle while taking jabs at each other for fashionable lesions that are all the rage. Regardless, it IS perfect, according to the (stanza A) 123456, (stanza B) 615243, etc, form described on this page.
•Hey, take yourselves a seat and play.
•It’s fun.
•It’s for kids, but it’s kind of sexy?
•Omigod, it’s so uncomfortable sitting on the floor with my lesion.
•This is wholly stupid.
•I’ve only spun once, but I think I did kind of good.
•Hey, don’t you think Quendy looks good?
•Just shut up and play.
•I think it looks stupid.
•It’s a good look, and kind of fun.
•Huh? You can see her like muscles and tendons and ligaments and stuff through the lesions.
•Yeah, which makes you kind of think about what’s inside, huh? Which is sexy.
•You must be chatting about how Quendy looks really sexy.
•Yeah, we were…just saying that the lesions look good.
•Oh, you like the lesions?
•Can we just play?
•Well, I think they’re a lot of fun.
•And don’t let anyone tell you you look stupid.
•Nothing’s stupid
•That’s right, Quendy, because seeing what’s inside of you, all your guts, is just so sexy.
•Calista, we’re just having fun.
•That’s good.
•Time to play.
•Quendy, do you know what’s funny about your lesions?
•About your lesions?
•What’s fun is watching a girl who’s so desperate for someone’s boyfriend that she does something to herself which is really stupid.
•Okay–let’s–just–let’s–fuckin’–fuckin’–just let’s play.
•Hey there, sexy.
•Let’s make this good.
•This isn’t much fun
•We’ll show you fun.
Hey there. I'm Ariel Meadow Stallings, a native Seattleite who's written my way up and down the Left Coast. Electrolicious is where I post daily randomata, but I also write for a living. My first book, Offbeat Bride, was published last year.
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Grayson
October 15th, 2002 at 7:55 am
Actually, besides being a terrible sestina, the last bit should be three lines, using the first, third, and fifth end words, with the second, fourth and sixth incorporated elsewhere into the lines.
It’s kind of a decent gimmick to use the sestina like that, but as someone who loves the form, that one just sucks.
btezra
October 15th, 2002 at 8:45 am
I am glad I popped in, I was headed to Barnes/Noble over lunch to pick up some early Xmas gifts…now I have a gift for myself to buy ~ thnx
leblanc
October 15th, 2002 at 12:01 pm
added it to my amazon wishlist of stuff to buy in the future. cool. and i like the sestina form very much (although i have to say i agree that that one example was not great). i’ll have to try that one out soon.
kf
October 15th, 2002 at 3:08 pm
here’s a good sestina, by elizabeth bishop.