Final tally:
When I started reading Breaking Dawn (the final book in the Twilight saga, a bestselling young adult vampire series) I started counting the number of times author Stephanie Meyer overused these three words to describe her characters’ actions. It felt like a fun way to track the author’s weakness for this particular imagery. Everybody flinches constantly in response to dialog. It’s he said/she winced! Ooh, cringe cringe goes the character.
By the time I was done with Breaking Dawn, the tally had become a brief, exact book review.
I almost gave up on the book early on — the whole pro-life teen pregnancy (It’s a necessity; not a choice!) felt grossly out of place. But Meyer is nothing if not compelling — something about the way she writes has forced me to keep reading.
But I think the spell is broken after reading The Host and now the whole Twilight series. I’m done flinching at her terrible-but-compelling writing. I’m done wincing at her creepy relationships (Meyerville: where the men are borderline abusive, and the women love to take it). I’m done cringing from the downright squickish age differences (infant girl & 16 year old boy = wtf?).
No more flinching, wincing, or cringing for me. Stephanie Meyer, I’m quitting you.
(And yes, I’m aware that this threat has little value having now read all her books. But it’s gotta stop somewhere)
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Hey there. I'm Ariel Meadow Stallings, a native Seattleite who's written my way up and down the Left Coast. Electrolicious is where I post daily randomata, but I also write for a living. My first book, Offbeat Bride, was published last year.
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Sarah
August 4th, 2008 at 3:21 pm
My sentiments exactly. Thank you for articulating what I couldn’t.
Kristy
August 4th, 2008 at 3:31 pm
I didn’t come upon the bandwagon of Edward and Bella until a week ago. I decided to challenge myself to read through her first 3 in the twilight series in one week and then go get the fourth one when it ame out. I made it thru the first 3 and now the 4th is on my nightstand and I fnd that I’m not much interested. Sure I’m glad you didn’t provie any spoilers because perhaps I will read it one day….but…I just wanted to know what the hoopla was about…and trust me..it’s not well founded. I thiink we get caught up because she has a style of writing that pulls you along just enough….just enough for you to hope it gets better. However, her writing SKILL is rather non-existent. Imagination…yes…skill..NO!!
Beth
August 4th, 2008 at 9:47 pm
If I were to invent a Twilight drinking game, it would go like this: drink every time the book mentions Edward’s eyes. Like “Bella gazed into Edward’s beautiful eyes and saw a sudden flash of anger in them” and “Bella could see concern filling his amber eyes” - I swear, it’s just non-stop. Dude has some expressive eyes. And yet, still I read all three (and will probably read the fourth). Definitely not good writing, but the plot just compels you along.
lauren
August 5th, 2008 at 7:19 am
I thiink we get caught up because she has a style of writing that pulls you along just enough….just enough for you to hope it gets better. However, her writing SKILL is rather non-existent. Imagination…yes…skill..NO!!
i agree with you, kristy (and you, ariel); one of the reasons SM’s shortcomings haven’t bothered me more (i read twilight and new moon last week and will read eclipse and breaking dawn this week…sub-par writing or no, i’m a slutty consumer when it comes to vampire culture) is that she acknowledges it herself (”i’m a storyteller, not a writer,” or something like that). i wish her language was as inventive as some of her plot details - but, more to the point, i wish her editors were a bit more diligent. stephenie meyer herself might not know she’s beating descriptors to death, but someone at her publishing house should, no?
Summer
August 5th, 2008 at 7:52 am
I just finished it last night. In terms of all the teeth clenching, lip percing, and snarling, I had to remind myself that Harry Potter had enough stomach lurching to qualify for serious gastrointestinal distress. However, I may never look at the color yellow the same–my omelette will now be described as ochre, topaz, gold, sunny, LIQUID, etc. Good lord, lady, put away the thesaurus and your Muse records and call it a day!
Lindsay
August 5th, 2008 at 9:50 am
Ok so I agree with everyone about Stephenie saying “wince”, “Flinch” and “Cringe” along with numerous other words far too much in her novels… However Stephenie has said from the begining that she isn’t a writer, and she never has been. This was simply something that she dreamed up and felt compelled to write down. I am a huge fan of the Twilight series… I have been from the beginning and I thought that Breaking Dawn had the ending that we were all hoping for. I personally was very happy with the way the series ended, I feel like I have the closure that I needed, and that is good enough for me. I love Stephenie Meyer and her writing style… Of course not everyone is going to be a fan, not everyone is going to be completely satisfied… but I was and that is all that matters :]
Amanda
August 5th, 2008 at 10:33 am
Don’t you just hate it when a so-so writer comes up with a great idea?
I can’t tell you how many times I’ve read books with wonderful premises only to find the writer is a hack.
We remake movies - let’s remake books too!
morgan
August 5th, 2008 at 2:13 pm
I really like the Twilight Series. But Breaking Dawn? That was absolute torture. No teenage girl should be that stupid. It’s ridiculous.
Vanessa
August 5th, 2008 at 2:17 pm
I had to chuckle when I read this article along with the comments because I, like Kristy, only jumped into this frenzied sea of vampire hoopla a week ago, and yet, I thought I was the only one who recognized the incessant use of the same adjectives and verbs. It’s driving me crazy!!!
I have yet to read Breaking Dawn, and even have a few chapters of Eclipse left, but the thrill in which I was caught up while reading the first book has sadly dwindled and while I will read the final book, I am afraid I will be disappointed. I sort of feel like this whirlwind that SM created in her head blew and blew and blew to a fever pitch, and now there is so much left to resolve, it can’t possibly be done in only one more book.
Who knows…maybe Iwill be pleasantly surprised if the story pulls together; if not for that reason, then maybe for a more varied use of descriptors.
Aberdeen
August 5th, 2008 at 2:52 pm
Amanda, couldn’t agree with you more.
I was thoroughly disappointed by the book. Not necessarily the plot, I think it could have worked if Meyer had written it well enough.
The thing that irked me the most was that she seemed to ignore the essence of her characters; which oddly enough is what she claims is the driving force behind her writing - the character development.
Darlene
August 5th, 2008 at 4:52 pm
I have so many mixed emotions on Breaking Dawn but still think that SM is a great writer. I think there is no doubt her first 3 books were excellent. I mean they all went to number 1 sellers, so that should say something. I think like anything you have to let it go when the going is good. Eclipse probably should have been the last book because, how much can you beat a dead horse. I always believe go out when the going is good before you ware out your welcome. Also I think that a good writer should be more based on the imagination and plot of a story. A great writer can have a gift of being creative but lack the skills of perfect grammar and writing skills thats when paying a editor comes in. So I personally think SM need to get a new editor. All in all i will always love the twilight saga and I still like SM.
Gypsy
August 5th, 2008 at 6:56 pm
Also the thing I’ve noticed about her books, it seems like she writes just to fill up pages so her books seem huge. She seems to ramble a lot. I really realized that though when I read the Host, I was really disappointed in that one it seems to just drag on completely. Don’t get me wrong when I read twilight I thought it was amazing, but honestly the older I got I realized how cheesy it was when you got the second book. I just think shes is alluring but still very redundant. I’m not finished with breaking dawn, I just received it the mail i’m only on page 180 and something. And before I even started to read it I KNEW that it was going to have some annoying problem, and that i would have to read 400 pages just to get to a simple point.
Heather
August 5th, 2008 at 10:08 pm
As I read the Twilight series, I began to notice more and more repetition and rambling. In Breaking Dawn, I found so many “typos” I couldn’t stand it. And I wasn’t even looking for them! They just stuck out so bad. Very poorly edited. I loved the plotlines of the books. However, they definitely could have been written a little better. But I found myself being sucked into each aspect of the book. Even as it seemed she was rambling to fill up page space, I read every word and throughly enjoyed it. Even though, at the time, I knew it was poor writing. It’s strange how books so badly written can completely captivate me.
Shelly
August 5th, 2008 at 10:15 pm
I agree wholeheartedly with your review!
The first three books were great. Breaking Dawn was only barely bearable because of its hilarity. I laughed out loud at almost every other chapter. I went hysterical when I’d drawn the conclusion of Jacob imprinting on the mutant baby. I was holding my sides, almost close to eruption. It got so weird, I just didn’t believe it could get any weirder. And then it did.
Breaking Dawn was a disappointment but, honestly, how good did we actually expect it to be? I mean, I get the impression that Meyer lives vicariously through Bella. I knew everything would be too convenient! I just knew that Bella would end up, against whatever odds, with everything she’d ever wanted. She even got to keep Charlie. Wouldn’t the Volturi have done something about that? Couldn’t Aro see that in Edward’s mind?
Anyway, the greatest disappointment of all was Bella’s super vampire power. I know it helped her out with the Volturi and protecting her friends and such but it proved to be pretty lame. I really thought that she’d have something more… exciting? I dunno. Something besides being a shield.
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